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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 22, 2005 19:36:34 GMT -5
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 22, 2005 23:25:35 GMT -5
These are great! I can't describe them in one word, because they each have their own voice. I really like The Weight, and Lost. Lots of emotion. I like them. ^_^
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 23, 2005 13:59:08 GMT -5
oh cool i like my weight poem too...^_^
ive been trying to get symbolism in most of the things i've been writing...but those r really old work =(
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 24, 2005 17:03:55 GMT -5
Well, write a bunch more whenever your inspired, and I'll read them. They're really interesting. ^_^
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 24, 2005 17:11:04 GMT -5
ty! im glad u enjoy! but as of now im gonna do a halt...then soon ill start writing again ^_^
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 24, 2005 19:21:05 GMT -5
Fine by me, wouldn't be good to rush anything. ^^
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 24, 2005 19:41:50 GMT -5
other than weight and loss...did u like any other? wat exactly stood out? what can i change in one or two of them?
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 25, 2005 15:28:03 GMT -5
I couldn't even go into what you could change on them. I've never written a poem in my entire life. I'll leave that to skilled people. I forget what the basketball one was called, but I liked that one too. I stood out because it reminds me about a particular petpeeve at school and I feel like when I'm reading the poem I'm taking on that persona.
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 25, 2005 17:43:30 GMT -5
u mean the volleyball one? i never wrote one on basketball yet......
lol im glad u give me some feedback lol
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 25, 2005 20:35:02 GMT -5
That one.
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 26, 2005 20:56:26 GMT -5
that's volleyball lol
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 28, 2005 12:09:18 GMT -5
Lol, sounds like basketball. Maybe if you changed pass the ball, to bump the ball. There isn't anything in it that makes it seem like volleyball. Like serving, bumping, spiking, and setting are terms that would help. But now I like it more if it's about vollyball. I played, and it's my favorite sport. ^_^
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 30, 2005 13:52:47 GMT -5
oops it was bball.....never remembered writing that one...sorry karumichan! =(
*runs and hides in a corner*
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Post by Karumichan on Oct 31, 2005 14:57:46 GMT -5
Your confusing me on purpose aren't you?
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Post by EvilDunkin on Oct 31, 2005 21:04:17 GMT -5
no i just dont remember .....umm when i replied to u i was sort of um drunk sooo yeah
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